ext_87387 ([identity profile] wordswoman.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] mmerriam 2008-06-10 04:24 pm (UTC)

How exciting! I like it overall, but I'd suggest avoiding specific dates, so that the bio remains evergreen as time goes by. I don't think it matters *when* you moved to Minnesota, for example, or exactly what year you resumed writing.

I'd also suggest rephrasing the geography sentence to make it a bit livelier. It's your opening sentence, and it isn't really a hook.

And hey, give your household names: "...with his wife, Sherry, and their ordained cat, the Reverend Selena X. Merriam."

The list of jobs is fun; the publications are good. But it doesn't really reflect how MUCH you've been published. I'd suggest something like "Michael has sold more than ### science fiction, fantasy, and horror stories..."

Can't wait to see the finished collection!

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