Sagging In The Middle

[mmerriam]

Garg!

Dark Water Blues has clipped along at a pretty good pace, with a good mix of action and rest. But here in the middle my characters are taking refuge in a church while the folks that want them dead--or at least neutralized--lurk outside and the priests try to negotiate a truce. The whole narrative has slowed down to a crawl.

I think I'm going to have to either give my characters a reason to attempt a breakout, or I'm going to have to blow something up.

Comments

[lizziebelle.livejournal.com]

Ooh, blow something up! *g*

[mmerriam.livejournal.com]

I think we are going the breakout (actually sneak out) route, with explosions and magical lightning storms to follow.

[janradder.livejournal.com]

Blow something up! Blow something up!

[mmerriam.livejournal.com]

The characters are sneaking out right now. There will be explosions later, either the Grainbelt Brewery Building or the Landmark Center are going to get it.

[elandryn.livejournal.com]

I vote for blowing something up!

[mmerriam.livejournal.com]

I think we are going the breakout (actually sneak out) route, with explosions and magical lightning storms to follow.

[xjenavivex.livejournal.com]

can you give them a reason to break out while blowing something up? i love the subject title. this is great.

[mmerriam.livejournal.com]

I think they are going to sneak out, which will lead to chases and explosions later!

[xjenavivex.livejournal.com]

oooooooh so nice!

[tiny-wings.livejournal.com]

Explosions!

[mmerriam.livejournal.com]

I think we are going the breakout (actually sneak out) route, with explosions and magical lightning storms to follow.